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The Inuyasha Fanfic Contest
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Week 155--Quote 
August 26, 2008 - 10:56 PM
adventure
Title: But Slumber'd Here
Author: the_glow_worm
Rating: PG
Word Count: 289


Imagination, of course, can open any door-- turn the key and let terror walk right in.

-Truman Capote



On her fifteenth birthday, Kagome Higurashi fell down a well and woke a sleeping demon and aimed an arrow like she was born to it and ran away to save the world.

 

The first time she saw him, Inuyasha had looked so vulnerable, alone and asleep in the golden sunlight; she reached out to touch him and Sota was already running, panicked, back towards their house.

 

Then, bickering and uneasily allied, they were lured into Yura’s keratinous web; and gentle fingers were cutting away her bloodied hair.

 

A sword in her trembling hand, she faced down Inuyasha’s cold brother in their father’s vast tomb; and in the white lights of the emergency room, doctors snapped on latex gloves.

 

Her quest for the Shikon shards had brought her face to face with monsters, side-by-side with the most loyal friends she could ever have, and gave her heart-stopping adventures; meanwhile, she breathed shallowly on an operating table, blood moving slowly in her veins.

 

The first time she realized she was in love with Inuyasha, doctors were trying to get her heart to beat again.

 

When she shot the arrow that finally finished Naraku, the nurse changing her sheets could swear she saw her hand move, but then again, probably a trick of the light.

 

Their first kiss was every bit as wonderful as Kagome knew it would be, as plastic breathing tubes slithered coldly down her throat.

 

And at the end of her fairytale, Kagome lived happily ever after, and her family still came by the hospital sometimes to visit.

 

On her fifteenth birthday, Kagome Higurashi fell down a well and splintered her skull and broke her neck and never again woke from her sleep—but she dreamed, perhaps, of wonders.

Comments 
August 27, 2008 - 3:07 AM (UTC)
Whoa. Very powerful. Extremely well written.
Devastating, and I must now go pretend I never read it.
August 28, 2008 - 1:18 AM (UTC)
Hold on, let me go get my scalpel so I can etch it on the inside of your eyelids.

(Thanks for reading!)
August 27, 2008 - 6:40 AM (UTC)
Incredible. I love how you switched between one reality and the other. Dark yet creatively done. Go, you.
August 28, 2008 - 1:17 AM (UTC)
Thanks--that was personally my favorite aspect of the fic. An alternative version (which I had neither edited nor checked for medical accuracy) I had considered went something like this:

Kagome sometimes dreamt--the strangest things, and only since she fell down the well--of men in white gloves, and bright lights, and her mother's tears. And she knew, the way you know in dreams, that her mother was crying for her, but every time she tried to tell her that she was fine, not to worry, that Inuyasha was protecting her--she could not speak for all the things that were in her mouth, gagging her, going all the way down her throat and into her lungs, and smelling foully of chemical.

Then she would wake, and stare at the feudal sky, and at her companions, whom she loved, and try to forget the nagging feeling that none of it was real.


Which I rather liked, but that was as far as I got before I realized I didn't know where else to take this. I wish I had some way of blending the two, because this one is much more my style, but the one I posted did a much better job of making the premise absolutely clear.

Ah well. A writer's life, I suppose.
August 27, 2008 - 11:14 AM (UTC)
Wow! An excellent twist on the "fairy tale" of it all.
August 28, 2008 - 12:51 AM (UTC)
Oh, haha, I only thought of that aspect of it after you pointed it out. Me = secret genius? We may never know!
August 27, 2008 - 4:35 PM (UTC)
Very nice interpretation of the quote. I like the dark mood of this short. I had to re-read the comment about Souta running back to the house, but then when I went on, everything became clear.

Who knows what dreams may come...

Thanks for writing this for us. I really enjoyed it.
August 28, 2008 - 12:53 AM (UTC)
Glad you enjoyed it! Yeah, I meant for it to be a bit confusing in the beginning. Gave the the twist a bit more oomph that way, I felt.

You're welcome, and thanks for reading!
August 27, 2008 - 4:54 PM (UTC)
This was a twist I'd never imagined. What a wonderful interpretation of the quote. It makes you want to curl up in bed and shudder. Great Job!
August 28, 2008 - 12:57 AM (UTC)
What kind words! It gives me a lot of joy to take unexpected twists on prompts; keeps the creative juices flowing, y'know?

I'm glad you enjoyed it.

August 27, 2008 - 6:07 PM (UTC)
Yes. YES! I’m not even sure what else there is to say! Incredible! Gah, I’ve never used this many exclamation marks in my life!! You have just reinvented The Dark!fic genre!!! Oh, I sound like a gushing little fangirl, but, my god, that was the most awe-inspiring thing I’ve read in months!! That’s even up to par with Hero in the 21st Century!!!!! Jeebus, I need to lie down O_O
August 28, 2008 - 1:01 AM (UTC)
Darkfic? Really? Me? That's...very flattering! But I'm afraid I'm not very good at Darkfic, and never have been. I just have a certain fondness for the unexpected. But thank you reading, and commenting so exuberantly, although I felt just a little tired after reading so many exclamatory statements, to be honest. =P
September 11, 2008 - 5:28 AM (UTC)
LuxKen had this on their recommended reading list so I thought I'd give it a read. The premise sounded quite interesting and it definitely didn't disappoint. This is phenomenal work! Have you considered fleshing it out into a full length fic? I think it could be really well received if crafted the right way. I'd be up for reading it anyway so please let me know if you ever decide to go down that road with it. Otherwise, it's perfectly engaging just how it is. It certainly gives you something to think about.

All the best,

Langus
September 11, 2008 - 6:09 AM (UTC)
Thank you!

As for fleshing it out--I'm not sure I have the stamina for a full length fic, honestly. And having a catatonic protagonist isn't the most interesting of reads. It would have to be set after Kagome wakes up, and realizes that it was all a dream, as they say, and how she copes with it...I also wouldn't any of my favorite characters around to play with. And...geez, now I'm trying to convince myself not to do it. Damn you. Damn you with all the spite of the forgotten goddess. I have way too much to do to get involved with this!

But it's nice to know someone'd be interested in reading it, and that I'd made someone's rec list. =D
September 11, 2008 - 7:34 AM (UTC)
Hahaha sorry sorry! I know the feeling re: lacking the stamina for a full length fic. You make due very well with what you have though so don't even sweat it :) I look forward to reading more of your stuff when I get the time.

Have a good night!

Langus
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October 15, 2011 - 6:07 AM (UTC)
Thank you! Heh, I'd forgotten this fic existed. If you don't mind, where did you get linked here? It's just that it's quite an old fic, and I was curious to see what rec lists I was still on.

:)
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